Thursday, February 16, 2012
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They were sitting in the hallway talking just like they do every day after lunch when here she came, undoubtedly the hottest girl in school they both just stopped and stared as she walked toward them. Then as she passed them and proceeded down the hallway John spouted off like he always does. "Hey Zach checkout that ass". And they both turned to look at Taylor as she worked her hips down the Hall as if she just wanted them to check her out. "No doubt" Zack replied "she is pretty hot" "but she is such a skank "John said with a look of disappointment on his face "Its not Like you even have to try to hook up with her. Isn't that right Matt "Whats that" Matt asked not having a clue what the two were talking about. "O John and I were just discussing how attractive Taylor is but how she is a total skank." "Ya no kidding", Matt exclaimed, his eyes wide like a little kid who had just opened their favorite presents, "That girl is fine". "THere is just one problem she is like the town bicycle, everybody gets a ride".
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How could you add more depth to these characters? They are obvious pigs, but they need personalities and descriptions so readers can tell them apart. Also, make sure that when you type dialogue that you press "Enter" and use a new line with each thing your characters say.
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